Thread: A song I wrote today called The Truth Awaits...feedback? Constructive criticism
View Single Post
  #2  
Old 04-30-2008
FFDP FFDP is offline
Junior Member
  
Join Date: Apr 2008
Posts: 9
FFDP is on a distinguished road
Default
permalink
looks a little to much like an essay, try to condense some of the lines, and get the point across with fewer words.
Reply With Quote