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  1. 10-24-2010 #1
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    Here is one of my poems its called

    Heaven or Hell

    Heaven is above
    Hell is below
    They are places
    We all have to go

    There is no place
    That's inbetween
    We have to decide
    Deep down within

    Heaven is full of
    Angels and gold
    Hell is full of
    Fires and coals

    Do you believe in
    Heaven or Hell
    Or all the stories
    That the bible tells

    So I have heard
    Heaven is a beautiful place
    And hell is a
    Horrible disgrace

    I know which place
    I would rather be
    Somewhere with angels
    Where I can be set free

    Please do be honest
    And do tell
    Would you rather go to
    Heaven or Hell
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    That is really nice work. I have one question though, What about Purgatory? Anyway, I like the flow of it and how it rhymes.
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  3. 10-24-2010 #3
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    I often forget to leave commas and explanation marks out all my poems that I write all rhyme don't think I have done one that hasn't
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    But saying that I think we are already living in hell what with all the pain and suffering that we go through in our lifes people dying,drugs and all the brutal attacks that people suffer with
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    its with a rime...its nice... but ive heard that all the interesting people are going to hell..so guess where im going -
    “Do what you feel in your heart to be right, for you'll be criticized anyway. You'll be damned if you do and damned if you don't.”

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    Quote Originally Posted by carene2010 View Post
    But saying that I think we are already living in hell what with all the pain and suffering that we go through in our lifes people dying,drugs and all the brutal attacks that people suffer with
    Wait, so this is a big metaphor for the world we are living in today?
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    No that's just my personal opinion lol

    Hmmmm let me think would that mean that both me and you are going to hell being human
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    Well, you could go with the old belief that we were all predestined to go to hell and that every human being was a sinner.

    But, religion is a touchy subject, so we shouldn't get too far on those grounds.
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    your pretty face is going to hell ...muhahahahhhhhhhh
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    Lol

    Yep I don't normally discuss religion or politics as there two subjects people don't agree on thanks for your comments anyway
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