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    Hello. I'm not sure this I the place to be posting my lyrics, but I couldn't see any better place than here, so... *shrug*. This first one is called "Keepin' Me Down Again".

    KEEPIN' ME DOWN AGAIN.

    Perseverance.
    Perseverance is not a matter of choice.
    Some are set to fail, derail.
    Others just sail, oh so smoothly.
    I am in league with the former.
    Doomed to walk inches behind forever.

    Lost intentions pave the surface.
    A car nearly finds it's way, then reverses.
    Situation almost resolved when it worsens.
    These curses keeping me down again.

    Interference.
    Finding interference in every ****ing thing I do.
    Try to start anew, but I'm still nailed down by the old.
    My skull begins to break and I continue to fold.
    The lights dim and it becomes cold.

    Lost intentions pave the surface.
    A car nearly finds it's way, then reverses.
    Situation almost resolved when it worsens.
    Unseen forces keeping me down again.

    Assurance.
    I need assurance so I may stand upon solid ground.
    Days long gone stalk me like a starving hound.
    Turns my life into a viscious game of hide and seek.
    Might the tables turn, I'll be waiting.
    Tired, but never weak.

    I will persevere.
    None will interfere.
    I am more than assured.
    To go down like this is absurd.

    Lost intentions pave the surface.
    A car nearly finds it's way, then reverses.
    Situation almost resolved when it worsens.
    I will not be kept down again.
    Keeping me down.
    Keeping me down.
    Keeping me down no more.

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    *moves*

    All the lyrical gold goes here in the "Songwriting & Lyrics" section.

    Loudest of Love

    I'm tied within
    I'm luck's last match struck
    In the pouring down wind

    ~Chris Cornell~

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    A point of note,

    "Worsens" and "Reverses" don't rhyme.

    I say that only because I honestly don't think people should warp the way they use the English language so they can fit a particular style of music. Rather, a good lyricist respects grammar and proper pronunciation as language is their primary tool to impart a view or emotion, and bending the rules in order to fit a particular rhyme scheme is similar to someone cramming puzzle pieces in where they don't fit.

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    Default I am 100% aware that worsens and reverses don't rhyme.

    I know they don't rhyme. Very, very honestly, I didn't intend to rhyme those at all. I did realize from the moment I wrote it, that it does seem like I was trying to rhyme. Anyway, I like it and am probably not gonna change it. Your criticism is appreciated by the way.

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    LIFE WASTED IN NEVADA

    Snake eyes stare straight through your face.
    You find yourself relying on a single spaded ace.

    Life wasted in Nevada.
    Falling till you shatter.
    You were born here,
    Right into a loaded gun.
    Now you die here,
    Cause you always hit on 21.

    For thousndth time, you go all in.
    But in this table, the dealer always wins.
    Like vampires, they feed on your affliction.
    And gamble on your addictions.

    Life wasted in Nevada.
    Fall from the top of the ladder.
    You were born here,
    Right into a loaded gun.
    You will die here,
    Cause you always hit on 21.

    Snak eyes stare straight through your face.
    You find yourself relying on a single spaded ace.

    You will die, right along with me, right here in Nevada.
    Now face this, your life wasted.
    Traded for a six word epitaph.
    Life wasted right here in Nevada.
    Life wasted right here in Nevada.
    Life wasted right here in Nevada.
    (etc.)

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    This is the first song I've ever written that has no definite chorus. I'm trying to balance anger and imagery, so that's really what this is. It has no title at the moment. I like it, but that doesn't mean a whole lot if others don't, so go ahead and comment. Anything with *s around it isn't part of the song.


    You.
    You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand.
    Feed us promises of a better day to follow.
    Chew it for us and make us swallow.
    We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow.
    And if we die, you still get praise.

    You're so clever, but you're so stupid.
    It's such a deadly combination.
    You can lead us by the thousands.
    Lead us straight down.
    Down to hell, or to the sea to drown.

    You're nothing but a hater and a liar.
    I think the day will come when we fight back.
    But, I fear, not until we're knee deep in fire.
    This place is yours for now, but not forever.

    Shut up.
    You're not an angel.
    Shut the **** up.
    You're not a savior.
    Shut up and stop killing us.

    You've got a million people with their heads up their asses.
    And a million more with their hands up yours.
    You won't say the words that need be spoken.
    You will try to mend what is broken.
    But duct tape can't fix everything, you *****. *that, by the way, is my favorite part =)*

    Ah!
    Oh ****!
    You run to the scene, hammer and nail in hand.
    Feed us promises of a better day to follow.
    (Better days never to come.)
    Chew it for us and make us swallow.
    We swim and swim while you watch from the shallow.
    (I hope the tide tears you down.)
    And if we die, you still get praise.
    If we die.

    Shut up.
    You're no angel. *This part is heavier than before and yes, I changed it from "not an" to "no" on purpose because it sounds better with the heavier riff.*
    Shut the **** up.
    You're no savior.
    Shut up and stop this bullshit.

    You've got a million people with their heads up their asses.
    And a million more with their hands up yours.
    You won't say the words that need be spoken.
    You will try to mend what is broken.
    But duct tape can't fix everything, you *****.
    ****... you!

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    I'm looking for band members in the Reno area to get a serious project going. I've got a vocalist (myself) and a guitarist. We've got alot of good material that's yet to be recorded. I know the chances that anyone in this area will ever read this are slim, but I figured I'd try. Please reply on here or pm me if interested
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    ...TO ASTOUND*

    We are wanderers.
    Not lost, but never to be found.
    With the intention to thrive and astound.
    We are ponderers.
    Challenging everything.
    Questioning all opposition.
    We are vampires.
    Knowledge is our blood.
    We catalyze an observational flood. **
    We are warriors.
    Traveling through snow and sand.
    Ammunition always near at hand.
    With the intention to understand and*astound.

    Wanderers.
    With no destination.
    Ponderers.
    Hungering for information.
    Vampires.
    Fueled by the life of others.
    Warriors.
    With murderous intent.
    Bleeding for the oppurtunity to astound.

    We are all that strives to exist.
    We are every oppurtunity that's ever been missed.
    We are every being who has ever set out with the intention to astound.

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    NO MORE SHAME, NEVER THE SAME*
    This is not the way life is supposed to be and you know it.
    You've grown complacent, learned to shut out the ****.
    But the torment persists.
    You've got to fight before there's nothing to fight for.
    It's not too late to be heard.

    Technically speaking, you are a man.
    So man up.
    Or you'll go down again.
    Come out of that shell.
    Hiding from your antagonist is worse than living in hell.
    Don't make excuses.
    You can die trying or die crying.
    So don't let them bring the hammer down on you.

    You show them your fire.
    They all flee like rats.
    Ressurect yourself.
    Redeem with no strategy, no stealth.
    The opressers drop where they stand.
    No more living in shame.
    No more, you'll never be the same.

    You finally stepped up.
    Power is always in demand, but you've got more than enough.
    It's your time to cause fear.
    And the place is right here.
    Seems there's no limitations.
    In your path, you see only jubilation.

    You show them your fire.
    They all flee like rats.
    Ressurect yourself.
    Redeem with no strategy, no stealth.
    Drive the opressors out of your land.
    No more living in shame.
    No more, you'll never be the same.

    So you've really made a name for yourself.
    Put yourself on top and made sure there was no one else.
    But every empire reaches it's peak.
    And even gods become weak.
    The circle of life comes around once again.
    Sorry buddy, but this is the end.

    You see the fire.
    And you flee like a rat.
    Protect yourself.
    Rewind with no strategy, no stealth.
    Atleast you don't have to live in shame.
    No, you'll never be the same.*

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    "Lyrical Gold" lol

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    What type of music are these songs supposed to be? Like what genre?

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    Somewhere between industrial metal and thrash metal.

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    Quote Originally Posted by AL4228 View Post
    "Lyrical Gold" lol
    That's just a joke. I'm completely aware that these aren't the best lyrics, but I am confident that they are pretty good.

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    well that's cool. You write nice lyrics

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    Thank you buddy. You write lyrics?

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