Not What It Seems (Rough Draft)
Okay, this is a draft of one of my songs. tell me how I can improve it, please.
Not What It Seems
I always came in with a smile on my face
You were the only thing I looked foward to, anyday
when you were away, I always felt alone
But I never trusted anyone, at all!
The nightmares I had at night,
were always about my best friends,
either dying, or leaving me until the end
was near!
(Bridge)
I knew this would happen
Your lies are real
And I felt it under my skin
(Chorus)
This is
Not what it seems
I've always felt like this before
Just a pathetic mess and nothing more
You are
Not what you say
You were always living a lie before
Just somes pimp
Just someone's whore
I always felt there's no reason to lie
And when you confessed
I felt I was about to cry
I want to forgive but I'm afraid
it would backfire
Someday!
(Bridge)
I knew this would happen
Your lies are real
And I felt it under my skin
(Chorus)
This is
Not what it seems
I've always felt like this before
Just a pathetic mess and nothing more
You are
Not what you say
You were always living a lie before
Just somes pimp
Just someone's whore
It's not to late to change
To give back what you take
And take back what you gave
This is
not what it seems
I've always felt like this before
Just a pathetic mess
Nothing more!
(Chorus)
This is
Not what it seems
I've always felt like this before
Just a pathetic mess and nothing more
You are
Not what you say
You were always living a lie before
Just somes pimp
Just someone's whore
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very relatable to the audience with the right chord progression and a catchy bridge, it could be awesome 
