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    24 HOURS *

    This place...
    Land of the ignorant devil.
    That face...
    Haunting me on a whole new level.
    Never...
    Never again will I be the victim.

    *spoken*
    I will not be your victim.
    I'm not one to be picked on.

    In 24 hours, can't believe how much I've lost.
    Won the battle, but at what cost?
    It's like a one-sided coin tossed.
    And you just happened to call heads.
    But believe me, you will tell no tales.
    In 24 hours, everything's gone to hell.

    A race...
    To the tip-top of the food chain.
    Make haste...
    Or I may find myself slain.

    *spoken*
    I will not die like a *****, son.
    I'm not one to be picked on.

    In 24 hours, can't believe how much I've lost.
    Won the battle, but at what cost?
    It's like a one-sided coin tossed.
    And you just happened to call heads.
    But believe me, you will tell no tales.
    In 24 hours, everything's gone to hell.

    I will not live this way.
    Being scared every day.
    I will not live this way.
    One must go so one may stay.
    And I will not live this way.

    A chase...
    But the tables have turned.
    Displaced...
    You better be concerned.
    Never...
    Never again will I be the victim.

    Next 24 hours, your existance will be lost.
    I don't give a **** 'bout the cost.
    Next 24 hours, you're going to hell.

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    I really like this! Especially ''It's like a one-sided coin tossed.
    And you just happened to call heads''. Without going into a long explanation of how it portrays alot of feeling, desperation and anger, i'll just say that its really good!
    Loving the end ''Next 24 hours, you're going to hell''.
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    Not to sound conceited, but this is definitely one of my better works. I'm glad you liked it. thanks for reading.

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    I like it..... it sounds like something I would listen to over and over and over again....

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    Thank you very much. I appreciate it. I've posted another one entitled "Heaven At Sea", check it out if you want.

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