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Old 04-24-2008
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Default Look at these lyrics I wrote?

Sort of a mix of soul and post-punk in my mind.

M. M. M. M.
Friday Night,
Gum chewin and
Lights flashing and
My nose is burning from the smell of the beer
Checkered tablecloths make my eyes feel weird.

Cuz I’m seasick on the side of a pool table
Honey all this honey is
Ooooh
Chillin
But, Oooh
I’m willing
To drop drop drop it all.

I’m telling you 2 more lonely hours
In the back of the bar playing table cards
With strangers that look like they live in 80’s cars
From you I bet they don’t live that far.

Oh Hell, Where’s the rum?

And I’d tell you that it’s time to leave
But baby you’re looking so pristine
At the counter with your friends
Putting down shots hand in hand
But really I just don’t want to get hit again.

M. M. Ba- da- bi- ba ba.
M. M. Ba- da- bi- ba.

Fiesta.

Oh Halleluja.

Cuz I’m seasick on the side of a pool table
Honey all this honey is
Ooooh
Chillin
But, Oooh
I’m willing
To drop drop drop it all.

It’s been 3 more hours, I’m walking away.
Your hair’s in knots
Your friends they all say
Dirty stories about my past.
Oh they think I’m the kind of girl who gets lost in woods.
They’ve got me all wrong, they’ve got you spot on.

Oh no, I’m not in love. Even your teeth will be all rot
By the time I’m old enough to be this drunk.
You want a beer, babe?
You’ve had enough.
I hope your taxi driver doesn’t charge that much.

Oh Hell, where’s the rum?
"Fiesta" is not supposed to be in there...

Advice + critisism is greatly appreciated.
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A famous singer can sing that song and dedicate it to you and you will be rich and famous!
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Its a good fun song but i would never put that on there do you know people could steel that form you and make the money you could be making form it.,
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haha... i likey...did u do this all by urself??

i have a cousin and he plays the guitar (kinda) and you can be playing like solitair and he will start making up a song playing the guitar and everything.... i love him to death... they they arnt really serious songs they are like u hear it and u crack up and u cant stop laughing.... he made wrote a song and burnt it off and he was gonna give it to a record company but never did...

any way,... i think its pretty good..
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