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Old 04-25-2008
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The Dancing butterfly

With more grace than a courtesan,
Dancing to the tune of your soul,
Your butterfly wants to take you away
To a world that’s free and yours

You say it’s just an illusion of my mind
I say it’s who you are baby
Your dancing butterfly only wants what’s best for you
It wants to take you to a world
With no rules and no control

With more grace than a courtesan,
Dancing to the tune of your soul,
Your butterfly wants to take you away
To a world that’s free and yours

Your soul is also your butterfly baby
And it only wants what’s best for you
Only you won’t let it rhyme with you
The way only it can do

With more grace than a courtesan,
Dancing to the tune of your soul,
Your butterfly wants to take you away
To a world that’s free and yours

They say they love you
And you love them too
They say do as we say
Right or wrong don’t come into it
You know baby they gonna ruin you
They’ll just wipe away your butterfly
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and your point is? (only joking joe). Beautiful and from the heart of a talented person
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thats amazing. its really beautiful. keep up the good work.
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Personal opinion the use of the word (you)is used way to much.Try using other words that means the same but are different.Not a smart a$$ just my opinion,it's a beautiful song
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b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l =)
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wow thats beautiful
well done
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