You know when you fall in love
You think that is going to last for ever
What a fool the one who thinks that
The Breakable is never going to break
Have you ever seen a women cry,
For a man that didn’t deserved her heart
For a man that only brought pain to her soul
This is a story like Romeo and Juliet
Full of pain
Once there was a young lady
Who had never fall in love
Had never shed a tear of pain
But as the time goes by she meets this guy
that would change her whole life
So he promised her the world and the sky
Telling her that they will always be together
But everybody knows that love doesn’t last for ever
So the time goes by and the love starts to die
But the young lady just wants some love
To get and to give but what she doesn’t know
Is that love… love kills and hurts and
makes you not want to live anymore
So one day sad and depress
She calls the guy that was once her whole life
Telling him to comeback
And to give her another chance
But the guy that had only played with her heart
Made sure that she wouldn’t ever call back
Miserable and weak she felt like she had no option
But to end her agonizing life
See not does only love hurt
But it also ends lives
So ladies don’t give up
That someday the guy of your dreams
Will wipe all your tears away
its too long, its too obvious, i wont comment on the message but you need to eliminate the rhymes if its a poem
it would do better as a song, if it were a poem it should be made much much short and more concise, this would do better to be a story and be put into prose form
Is this a good song/poem? I wrote it{{love}}?
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