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Old 04-29-2008
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Default What do you think of these lyrics i wrote?

“Better Than He Can”

Verse:
My intentions were clear
As I put my heart on the floor
The moments we shared
Are something I just can’t ignore

You’re the one thing in life that
I’ve always been searching for.
There is not one thing about you
that I can say I don’t adore

Chorus:
Why did you leave me?
Why don’t you care?
I told you I love you
Id always be there
Now your with him
And I don’t understand
Cause baby Id love you
Better than he can

Verse:
The words that I spoke
were nothing if not true
You’re the one thing in my
life I just have to pursue

So how could you choose him
after all that we had been through
He knows nothing about you
that I can say I never knew

Chorus

Bridge:
Id treat you better
Id love you better
Promise ill be better
Better than he can
Better than he can
Better than he can
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Old 04-30-2008
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good song dude, realy nice effort, is it about something that actualy happend or wat??
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Tears came to my eyes, when I was reading your lyrics. becouse it's my life
story.

Anyway, ultimately I was better than him. I WON
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Not bad...

Say if this was going to be created, what genre of music would you like it to be?
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great great great song
oh it's like i relive the past.
There were some happenings in my life, what looks just like the yours.

Great, really beautiful.
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Thumbs up where's the music

Where can we hear your song?

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Very nice, keep it up, it was much better then I expected another love song to be.
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Maybe an Rnb song or a pop rock song. Are yougoing to get female or male vocals?
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Aww this made me sad..but, i loved it!
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its pretty good. i think the chorus lines are a little too short. but other than that i really enjoyed it.
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