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Thread: Help writing a song for my wife!?

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    Default Help writing a song for my wife!?

    This is what I have so far - I wrote it all by myself. What do you think?

    Every night in my dreams
    I see you, I feel you,
    That is how I know you go on

    Far across the distance
    And spaces between us
    You have come to show you go on

    Near, far, wherever you are
    I believe that the heart does go on
    Once more you open the door
    And you're here in my heart
    And my heart will go on and on

    Love can touch us one time
    And last for a lifetime
    And never let go till we're one

    Love was when I loved you
    One true time I hold to
    In my life we'll always go on

    Near, far, wherever you are
    I believe that the heart does go on
    Once more you open the door
    And you're here in my heart
    And my heart will go on and on

    There is some love that will not go away

    You're here, there's nothing I fear,
    And I know that my heart will go on
    We'll stay forever this way
    You are safe in my heart
    And my heart will go on and on

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    No, this is all wrong! I mean, unless you want your relationship to become a sinking ship, I would seriously consider re-writing this! I give you points for effort but SURELY you can do better than this? I know you put a lot of effort into it, but it's just so terrible.
    Throw this overboard and start over.

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    I wish I could feel like you. All my poems/songs are empty and depressing.

    Its very nice man

    EDIT: Hey wait a min. I checked those lyrics. They are Celine dions

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    I THINK THE TITLE OF THIS SONG SHOULD BE CALLED
    AND MY HEART WILL GO ON AND ON.
    I REALLY THINK THAT your words are in a repeating mode , , their is no story to this song except that your heart goes on and on lets take a look in the first verse youaresayng that in your dreams ise you and feel you , then futer down the track you are saying their is some love but in the in one of the verses you are telling us that you believe the heart goeson and on, I do believe you haveto get this song into some order , so that the public , know what you are saying

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    Such skill. I can only hope that this song is strong enough to breakthrough the ice berg that is known as your wife's heart.

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    omg..i thought celine dion was a girl

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